Comments on: Oomph!

By: Kerri

Kerri — Sun, 29 Mar 2009 01:38:34 +0000

How about she is hesistant to reconnect with a guy she used to have feelings for when she sees him on facebook. She feels as though he was never attracted to her or else something would have surely happened years ago when she knew him in college. She ‘friends’ him and he sends her the most complimentary and lovely email. He lives across the country and is married with kids, yet embarks on this emotional affair with her, despite her current situation. She is beyond surprised at his attention and shocked by the beautiful things he says and the way it makes her feel. Her confidence starts to grow, yet she is torn because she knows that what she is doing with this man is wrong. She has an addictive personality and is powerless to resist his charms.

By: hatrack

hatrack — Fri, 20 Mar 2009 16:16:40 +0000

Oomph ideas, large and small, in no particular order
1. A house/apt fire. Fire can be an interesting device in a story; it can mean total or partial separations from home, temporary or permanent. Perhaps, a yuppie arsonist strikes to avoid foreclosure on investment property.
2. The phone rings, it is the Maury Povich show trying to reach the husband, and the baby sitter is looking a bit fat.
3. Identity Theft, leading to all shorts of troubles including much difficulty in getting online.
4. A perfect storm results in a series of snow days at school, with more due in the forecast.
5. The MTA proposes sharp service cuts in the train/bus lines she uses.
6. A model “family values” family with kids moves in next-door.
7. There goes the neighborhood, pick your direction. Clear threatening indications of a quick slide her ‘hood is taking, becoming a “bad area”; or the hood is moving the other way with new shops she can’t afford to set foot in.

By: Elizabeth Kerri Mahon

Elizabeth Kerri Mahon — Thu, 19 Mar 2009 14:11:37 +0000

Okay, my two cents. I agree with the dental surgery idea, as well as having the book start when he’s leaving her, perhaps when she gets home from having the dental surgery and she’s in pain, and then he hits her with, oh by the way, I’m leaving you.

If you stick with the six months later idea, then I would go with the car being repossessed. And is the father not paying any child support or alimony?

By: B.J.

B.J. — Thu, 19 Mar 2009 04:26:23 +0000

So – she needs a job – but she loves caffeine. Was the younger, blonder woman a barista at her favorite boho coffee joint? And she can’t stand the thought of having to go to the starbucks across the street that the window that she would have jumped out of faces?

The dad is not sending money for basic necessities why? Where is he living? Denmark next to the Lego factory? Maybe the barista blonde was from Copenhagen.

By: CindyS

CindyS — Thu, 19 Mar 2009 03:12:21 +0000

Okay, I’m no writer – does the blurb need more oomph or the opening?

She’s walking down a fancy hall in a gorgeous building, papers in her hands, juggling a fresh cup of coffee but she’s spilling every where.

Gets to door, big breath and knocks – Blondie opens door in great outfit. Anger, embarrassment, papers covered in coffee.

Where is he?

Blondie sighs and points.

Tromps into soon-to-be ex’s den.

School says son needs counceling and she needs money pronto. Husband says she’s just a bad mother.

CindyS